These are my five best comments over the course of this assignment. They outline positive points for the person’s concept, but also what I think they could improve on, whether it be something technical or something relating more to the actual ideas.
Despite this image not being complete yet it is still really grossing me out. I feel like that means it’s effective! The only thing that I think I can critique at the moment would be the lines around his chest, I’m not quite sure why they are there but then again, I’ve never looked at an autopsy before. The free transformation should be able to help with making the skin folds work more with the body, and that should really sharpen up the image. Excellent progress above all.
I know that you have been struggling to incorporate all your ideas while still keeping within the brief requirements, and I think what you’re building here is going to turn out really good! The tree coming from the book illustrates the notion you want to convey. Something I think would make it better however, would be enlarging the book and putting it at the bottom of the frame so that it fills all of the foreground to really make it stand out and push your idea even further. Great work!
I think that no matter what your final image is going to be it’s going to portray your notion extremely well. I know that you had doubts about your concept being too cryptic, and the only thing that I could say that might make it easier for the viewer to conceptualise, is having the other faces stand out a bit more (despite you saying you want them to be weak). My reason for saying that is because I really had to look closely at the two figures on the left before I could distinguish them as faces and not whisps of smoke! Love your concept and looking forward to seeing it finished.
I really like the idea of the fourth concept, as I think it could be super effective and thought provoking for the viewer, however I think that the full concept of your article (the drink driving part) may get a little lost. The idea of gambling with life and drinking alcohol can be broad as we see it quite a lot. I love the idea of the roulette board and hope it can all be incorporated!
When I first read that you were doing this article I was unsure which aspects from it you were going to portray, but what you have outlined so far sounds like it will be super effective. Just make sure you don’t get too committed to the idea incase some elements need to be changed later on!